Irony is the Shackles of Youth

It seems like there's a piece missing from the story, but I can't figure out what it is. Maybe some opinions will give me a better idea. Technically finished, but I reserve the right to add a scene later on if I'm still unhappy with it after another read through.

As a side note: I started writing this story after reading maderr's version of Rumpelstiltskin More Precious Than Gold. Her characterization of Rumpelstiltskin was what inspired my characterization of the Piper.

( Pied Piper, PG-13, finished? )